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السلام عليكم ورحمة الله وبركاتة.
مساكم/صبحكم الله بالخير جميعا.
اليوم معايا موضوع جديد طقطقت علية وكتبتة كامل
..... واتمنى اخباري بأي خطأ فيه عشان اكيد انا حستفيد والكل هنا حيستفيد وهذا هو عنوان هذا الموضوع ....
وانتظر من الأخ 1ok يقوللي ان اسلوبي في الكتابة بدأ يتطور ياارب : حظرت:.... وألف شكر لك مره واولى وثانية وعاشرة لإفادتي سابقا وافادة جميع الأعضاء وألف شكر لكل عضو شارك بمعلومة او تصحيح غلط سواء لية او لغيري ...
بالتوفيق وتحياتي للجميع ..
Getting an A in Class
.There are a lot of things I should do to get an A in class. First of all, I have to come on time everyday to be ready for the class before it starts.
If I came late, I will lose some of my points, my brain will not work immediately, and I will distract my classmates especiallywhen the
teacher starts the class .(or you can say, "when the class begin"). Next, I should go to the library to study before I go home for many reasons. first, the
place there encourages me to study when I see the students studying without disturbance.
Secondly, as an international student I can practice another language with native speakers and
I could ask someone there to help me out with my homework.Then, I have to pay attention to my teachers every class by asking
them for strange and new information. I should take notes for important words. In addition, I have to avoid things that disturb my attention in class, such as ,using cellphone or talking to classmates about other topics. After that , I should prepare for my
class before I come by reading the textbook for the new lesson and asking my teacher about the next class. Also, if I prepare for the new
lesson I will not surprise about the new information . Mother fore, I have to drinksomething good like coffee before the classes ,so I can get
energy in my mind to work very well during the day and it prevents my feeling to be sleepy. Also, the smell of the coffee makes me excited to
start my day very well.in addition, I have to sleep well for many reasons, if I do not sleep well I will be very tired so, I cannot get the
information in the class .unfortunately, my teachers will be upset at me during the class so, I will lose the points of participation in
my classes. Last thing, to get an A in class I should be active and participate in class.
. In conclusion, by doing all these recommendations I will be able to get an A in all my classes and I suggest to every student do it to achieve their goals and to be successful students.
Blue = corrected. Gray = Repeated sentences, ideas. Orange = Arabic slang.! "my brain will not work immediately "
I suppose that your brain doesn't work until you drink coffee...
This is an Arabic slang, so try to say " I won't pay attention." or " I will feel sleepy".
ATMOSPHERE : الغلاف الجوي
The envelope of gases surrounding the earth or another planet: "part of the sun's energy is absorbed by the earth's atmosphere".
for strange and new information
Shouldn't you ask them about the class itself ?
if you say " I ask them for a strange and new information" then the first thing you will hear is " Weird"!
I know you mean "smart questions" and that's because you think in Arabic!
so you have to delete :
every class by asking them for strange and new information
I have to drink something good like coffee
So you recommend to drink coffee because it's good ?
I don't think so, coffee it's not good for the body nor brain.
juice is good... but not coffee..
Try to rephrase the orange sentences, and delete the gray sentences ..
Resort your paragraph...
because you started in class ended up with sleeping early.
It'll be hard to catch up with the scenario ....
try to rewrite the scenario ( woke up early, breakfast, going to school, after school studing, then go home)
overall, you are improving very fast... there is a big difference between this paragraph and the old one.
keep it up, and I believe you'll be better than me in a short time. (you'll be able to find my mistakes and you'll be my teacher ) محمد فهد .. March 8th, 2013, 08:08 AM
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I am looking forward to see you again ...
but, I try my best ... so try your best and over the time you will be a better reader .